Kia ora, I am a student at St Francis of Assisi School, Welcome - Haere Mai. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note my work may include spelling or other errors because some of it will be my first drafts. I would like to get your feedback - comments, thoughts, questions and ideas to help me Learn Create Share.
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Wednesday, August 25, 2021
Why school should NOT ban junk food!
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To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - Begin with a greeting. Talk about something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A comment that will mean something to me to let me know you read/watched or listened to what I had to say. - use any language.
3. Something helpful - Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
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Hi Shyanne,
ReplyDeleteGreat start with your writing. I think that it would be good to go and look back at the learn create share and see what you need to include. It's really important to have a clear introduction and then three paragraphs with three different ideas and finally a summary. There is a checklist for you to work through. You have some great ideas in here you just need to think of a few more.
Keep up the good work!
Mrs Bryce